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he asked her if she loved him
and she looked at that golden boy
with a bumblebee smile and sad veins
like good champagne leaking onto the stars
only a million words were left unsaid.
EDIT: WOW!!! A Daily Deviation?! Thank you all so much!

EDIT:I honestly have no idea what to title this. I just left it at the first line, but if you have suggestions, please share. Thank you for your suggestions! I've finally picked a title, thanks to =Sammur-amat!

I love this poem, guys. I think this is the first poem in a long while that I actually have felt about passionately when composing and when it was finished. The words to describe the picture I had in my head came easily and they fit the picture I had perfectly. I hope you love this as much as I do :heart:
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Given 2013-09-27
honey-filled hearts by ~NonsenseQueen Suggester Writes: This poem has the inexorable infectiousness that can only come from young love. ( Suggested by Craazhy and Featured by Beccalicious )
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Medoriko Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Student Writer
Stunning. Just Stunning.
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much!
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thetonythethe Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional General Artist
this is such a good poem i love it so much! :D
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, homie! B)
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creataire Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
good job! the champagne line is my favorite, i think, but you captured an almost indescribable feeling in such a short poem. well done.
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
wow this is beautifully put. very well said :)  
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully written, smooth and flowing like fresh honey! :heart: 
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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