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I want to kiss every aching wound you have,
bandage your heart every time it bleeds,
and patch up your mind over and over
because not a single tear deserves to fall
from your brandy-drenched eyes;

This dripping heart of mine can only feel,
and the healing honey words it flames get caught
in the back of my throat and on the roof of my mouth,
so I only have these passionate guttural cries
to tell you that I care all too much.

In order to fix you up again,
I would need to tear myself to tatters
and trade all of my working parts
for your leftover, fading pieces
but I just haven’t figured out how.
i feel like if i describe this poem, i will just tell you what it's about. and i never want to do that. i love to hear what YOU guys think it's about, so tell me nd i'll note uyou what it actually is! fun!

and, once again, i don't think this title is very good. comment any suggestions you have!
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Daily Deviation

Given 2014-04-23
mechanic by saltwaterlungs shows how we give ourselves to others in order to help them heal and feel loved. ( Suggested by GuinevereToGwen and Featured by inknalcohol )
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RippedMoon Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
congrats on the DD xo
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:iconsaltwaterlungs:
saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner May 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconrippedmoon:
RippedMoon Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No problemo, you deserved it~!
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shep4life Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You can feel the empathy gushing out like a water spout
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:iconsaltwaterlungs:
saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner May 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad that it carried out well- I'm always afraid it'll just be words with no emotion behind it
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Not this one...well done
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Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Student General Artist
Beautiful. Beautiful. Beautiful. :heart:
Congratulations on the DD! You totally, totally deserved it. :huggle:
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:iconsaltwaterlungs:
saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconziaulkareem:
ZiaulKareem Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Big Congrats! Truly deserved! :)
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:iconsaltwaterlungs:
saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconhypermagical:
hypermagical Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014
Congratulations on the DD feature, Calypso! :heart:
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:iconsaltwaterlungs:
saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :dummy:
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:iconhypermagical:
hypermagical Featured By Owner May 23, 2014
You're welcome! :la:
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:iconwordeea:
wordeea Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
congratulations !!!!
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:iconsaltwaterlungs:
saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconaerode:
Aerode Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Incredibly proud of you. :huggle:
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you Spuddy!
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:iconaerode:
Aerode Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, bud! :la:
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er49563 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Student General Artist
These would be great as song lyrics..But PLEASE CAPITALIZE THE I's!!! PLEASE!!!!! U_U
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
DONE!

And maybe I'll write a song with it, you never know!
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er49563 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Student General Artist
Yay xD thank you~Also, that would be awesome..Well, I hope SOMEONE does, anyways!  Well done on the daily.
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks SO much!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconflyingheartsplz::iconsweethugplz::iconflyingheartsplz:
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Schwannie Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
This is so beautiful :squee:
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconianibal:
ianibal Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I love it!
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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FableTheWolf Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. This poem is just amazing. It just captured my attention, and put in to words almost everything that I was feeling at the time I read it.
It's very touching. You have a true talent here! Don't forget that. I don't think I've read anything so beautiful before. You more than deserve the DD. Congratulations!
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you SO much! :huggle:
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Wolf-Of-The-Heart Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Read this and listen to this. You shall cry tears of joy. www.youtube.com/watch?v=9Al_Nx…
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You could not have picked a better song, wow. Maybe i'll do a reading and overlay it with this song!
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Reminds me of a quote from the Mortal Instruments series (written by Cassandra Claire I think) "We are all drawn to the beautiful and the broken, but they demand a sarcrifice so great it destroys the giver." Oe something like that. 
It is horrible to see someone in pain, and we so desperately want to help them, heal them, like it says in the first verse. We want to stop their pain, their tears. And is the brandy-drenched eyes referring to alcohol?
And then the second verse: words are not enough. The emotion in them is too great to be put into words. The emotion is so great that it burns your mouth, and there is no way to express your feelings, your empathy and how much you care for them. 
And then the last verse, made me think of the quote. How we want to help someone so much we'd trade ourselves so that they might be okay. I really love the imagery in that, the way you've described it. This is a beautiful poem putting into words... Well c what I've described above. Well, that's my interpretation anyway. 

(And sorry for any spelling mistakes and grammar errors here. My iPod is lagging out like hell x'D)
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's a good quote!

I'm so glad that you got all the things I was trying to say and that you understand. "Brandy drenched eyes" refers to the eye coloring. I didn't want to say "brown" or "amber". Thank you again for taking time to read and alayze my work! I really appreciate it! :hug:
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
it's a good book too xD

Ohh, that's really cool xD
Heh, you're welcome. Thanks for writing something so beautiful! xD
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butter-holiday Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
I like this a lot. To me, it sounds like the speaker wants desperately to help the other person. But if the speaker doesn't know how to heal themselves, how can they possibly help another person? 

That's my take on it. Great job!
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Nice take, I hadn't thought of it that way!
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butter-holiday Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
Thanks :)
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Raine20oo Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have figured out how.
And it just left me broken. 
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on your second DD! :tighthug: You really deserved this; I'm sure you woke up with a surprise! Beautiful and consistent imagery, passion and tone. I adore the comparison of machinery to love. :) Nice job. 
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed :heart:
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woundikins Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Student General Artist
Incredible. This insight is perfect, I think a lot of people can relate to this. Maybe 'Love' would be a good title? It seems that this poem is about love :) (Smile) 
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! This poem is about love, but I prefer mechanic as the title because it grabs the reader's attention. Thanks for reading!
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Kyorukki Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
quite beautiful

'but i just haven't figured out how'

Q_Q merp
I wish you would write 'i' as 'I' but I guess that kinda contributes to the overall feel xD
awesome!
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!

This was written during my anti-grammar phase. I'll edit it!
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Kyorukki Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014
anti-grammar phase???
such rebel xD
lol np o.O" it was lovely to read
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Big ups to the raddest person I know. And one of the best poets too. Congratulations on the Daily Deviation, my dear friend. I'm so proud of you! And I love you! :heart: Phenomenal job. :love:
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you SO much, Ricky! You rock my toe socks! Stay cool B)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure, Hannah! Haha, yeah, toe socks!!! B-)
You too. :iconcoolplz:
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naseem-art12 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is a really pretty piece!!!! 
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